This week in writing we learned to use verbs (action words). After playing on the playground we talked about what we had been doing. We made our writing more interesting by using these words instead of 'went'.
I crawled in the orange tunnel. I zoomed
down the slide. I spun on the pole. I zoomed fast on the flying fox.
Fern
We walked to the playground. I wanted to go
on the monkey bars. I swung to get to the other side. Then I slid down the
slide. I did it again. I got off then hung upside down. My head started to hurt
so I got off. I walked along the wooden bridge. I slid down the green slide. It
was super fast but fun.
Tea
I climbed up the pole then I reached to the
top. I got onto the slide. I got on the
flying fox. I flew to the other side. I jumped on the bridge.
Aaron
I swung on the monkey bars then I got on
the pole and I spun around. I ran on the bridge then I climbed on the monkey
bars.
Ryan
Yesterday we walked to the playground. I
climbed on the jungle gym then I walked on the bridge. I slid down the green
slide. I zoomed on the flying fox then we all walked back to the classroom.
Amelia
I jumped on the bridge and moved to the
slide. Then I moved again to the grey monkey bars. I spun around.
Zayed
I slid down the slide. People were waiting
for a turn so I slid down fast. I zoomed on the flying fox.
Ebony
I zoomed down the slide. I crawled through
the orange tunnel. I walked on the wobbly bridge. I climbed on the monkey bars
to the top. I zoomed on the flying fox. I liked it.
Tane
I slid on the slide. I turned around on the
monkey bars.
Ondreous
I was hanging on the monkey bars. I hoped I
wouldn’t fall but I didn’t. After that I swung on the monkey bars. I zoomed on
the flying fox. I slid down the slide.
Brisa
We all walked to the playground. I slid
down the slide. It was fun. After that I walked to the monkey bars. I swung
upside down. I waited for my turn. After I walked to the climbing frame. I
climbed on it. Then we all walked back to the classroom.
Thea
I hung upside down on the monkey bars.
Bailey
I swung on the monkey bars. I waited on the
ladder for a turn on the slide.
Julius
I swung on the monkey bars. I spun on the
pole.
Pharell
We walked to the playground to play. We
shared the flying fox with our friends. I zoomed down the green slide.
Tiana
I jumped on the bouncy bridge. It was
wiggling and jiggling. Then I walked to the climbing frame. I hung down on the
climbing frame. It was fun. I did a flip then I walked to the monkey bars. I
swung all the way over the monkey bars.
Ayanda
Kia ora room 2. I am impressed with your writing. I don't even have to watch the slide show to see what you were doing, the verbs you have used have painted a very clear picture in my mind.
ReplyDeleteWell done all of you kids . Great writing skills. Keep it up your writing skills.
ReplyDeleteWell done all of you kids. Great writing skills. Keep it up your writing skills. We enjoyed reading about your activities in the way each of you has explained.
ReplyDeleteGreat! You all have described it very well all the fun you had. Loved the action photos.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Room 2 authors. I really enjoyed reading your writing. I liked the verbs such as zoomed, wiggling and jiggling, crawled and spun. These made your writing more interesting to read. What are some other words that you could use instead of walk?
ReplyDeleteHi Room 2 it's Zac from Room 7 your slideshow is so cool. Great writing how did you make the picture fade? It looked really cool. The playground is lots of fun hey. From Zac. If you want to you could check out our blog here's the link http://paihiaschoolroom7.blogspot.co.nz
ReplyDeleteHi Room 2 it’s Ezra from Room 7. I absolutely love your videos of your time on the playground and also your water safety video. It’s important to learn about safety in the water so that you don’t do anything wrong.
ReplyDeleteHi Room 2.
ReplyDeleteIt’s Zoe from Room 7, Ryan’s big sister. I watched the video of you guys on the playground. I bet you had heaps and loads of fun playing and climbing and going down the fireman's pole. Maybe next time you guys could do some funny or cool poses on the playground.. Keep up the good work. Here’s the link to the Room 7 blog:
http://paihiaschoolroom7.blogspot.co.nz/
From Zoe
P.S. I love your video and your work and your writing is amazing! :) :)
P.S. You guys are a very good class and you guys learn so much everyday! :) :)
Hi Room 2.
ReplyDeleteIt’s Zoe from Room 7, Ryan’s big sister. I watched the video of you guys on the playground. I bet you had heaps and loads of fun playing and climbing and going down the fireman's pole. Maybe next time you guys could do some funny or cool poses on the playground.. Keep up the good work. Here’s the link to the Room 7 blog:
http://paihiaschoolroom7.blogspot.co.nz/
From Zoe
P.S. I love your video and your work and your writing is amazing! :) :)
P.S. You guys are a very good class and you guys learn so much everyday! :) :)
Hi Room 2.
ReplyDeleteIt’s Zoe from Room 7, Ryan’s big sister. I watched the video of you guys on the playground. I bet you had heaps and loads of fun playing and climbing and going down the fireman's pole. Maybe next time you guys could do some funny or cool poses on the playground.. Keep up the good work. Here’s the link to the Room 7 blog:
http://paihiaschoolroom7.blogspot.co.nz/
From Zoe
Kia ora Room 2. My name is Mitchell from Room 7 at Paihia School. I really like your blog how you put photos into a mini movie good, job. You put comments telling exactly what you liked doing like zooming on the flying fox and crawling through the tunnel it's very fascinating. Kind Regards Mitchell. If you want to see our blog go to http://paihiaschoolroom7.blogspot.co.nz.
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